A House of Cards

October 04, 2012 , 13 Comments


This post is under 3 words Wednesday 3WW CCXCII. The prompt words are-Dignity (self respect), Lacerate (tear or deeply cut) & Ripe (matured & ready to harvest)
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His words lacerate through her dignity. She felt deceived, hurt and belittle, all together. “That’s a very rude thing to say and…” she said. “Whatever” He refused to talk and signaled an exit. The bond that should be ripe & strengthen actually seemed like a house of cards, why blame winds, waters or anything else.

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The autor is half Human, half machine. Go Figure or just revel in what I write

13 comments:

  1. Aah! That's a good one!!
    Wonderful take on the t :)heme!

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  2. All I can say is you were in a hurry as you wrote this.

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  3. More than having any interest in writing 55 Fiction, I just want to figure out why it even exists!
    Unless, of course, the idea is to develop this thought into a full blown short story. I think you should do that - from 55 Fiction to a 1550 Fiction! You should use this nice germ of a plot! Narrate the back story, and what happens next :)

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    1. Well...good that it exists, as I love writing them and a lot of time reading them.

      Full blown story needs loads of time (unlike written b y talent bunch like you- how much I loved ur melbourne jhalak dikhla ja wala post :D) and keen interest which I seem to have lost...55 fiction comes easier at times n easy to read esp for lazy ppl like me!

      Narrate the back story? aha.....thoda personal hai, some other time? :)

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  4. Very well written. Sentence structure is perfect.

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  5. wonderful words...implies so much...of things gone wrong...really wrong!!

    http://sushmita-smile.blogspot.in/

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    1. Many thanks Sushmita...things go wrong when we want to ...blaming water wind etc makes no sense:)

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  6. Short, crisp and hard hitting!

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  7. You have used the words beautifully in this story ... though short, it packs a lot of punch !!!

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