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Salaam- Namaste

Sunday, September 08, 2013 54 Comments


Salaam and Namaste were two brothers living together happily and peacefully. They were different from each other, a difference that made their mother- Humanity proud of them.

One day a "foreigner" came to visit them. He was fascinated by all the jewels "Humanity" had and made plans to loot it all. He entered their house but realized how two brothers protected the booty closely. He made a plan with a local "magician" and lured him to make the ruler of the land in return of the booty he wanted to steal from Humanity’s house.

The “magician” grabbed the offer and worked in unison. He disguised himself as a “servant” and took a job in Salaam Namaste’s shop in the name of their mother Humanity. He had nothing to do with “Humanity” and her service but to serve his greed to become the master of all her fortunes.

The “foreigner” concealed himself as a “chronicle traveler” and took entry in Humanity’s house as a guest. “Humanity” treated her guest with great dignity and respect who was actually plotting against her. With the help of “evil servant”, the foreigner gifted some “exotic magic seeds” to Salaam and Namaste. The brothers honored their guest’s gift and sowed them at their garden. The seeds grew in to beautiful looking plant with embellished flowers that changes colors during the day and night. The brothers were quite enchanted with the beauty and exotic value of the plant. It became a "piece DE resistance" of their garden & shop. They appointed the “evil servant” to water and take care of the plant for growing more pretty flowers to sell in the market.

The "plant" started growing and gradually covered the entire garden with it's branches, roots and wide stem. It grew strong by the day and even de-rooted some other fine local plants. The brothers did not complain as it helped them earn some "new money" and goodies in market. The plant grew so tall that one day it shot above their roof and broke it open. The brothers reprimanded the “evil servant” but were consoled by him saying that it will be fine and they should spend their time in counting the benefits from plan than complaining about it. Days passed and plant stopped giving flowers and fruits and started decaying. The "evil servant" took this as an opportunity and conspired brothers against each to create a rift between them. He bad mouthed Salaam about Namaste and vice verse.

The brothers got so busy in repairing their shop and preventing the plant to stop growing that they forgot to tend their house and their mother Humanity.

The "foreigner" took advantage of the situation and broke inside the vaults of humanity. He plundered all her valuables that he could, damaged her house and stashed away all that he could. When Humanity found his folly and confronted him, he attacked her and fled, leaving her badly bruised.

She cried for children’ help but they were busy dousing the fire created by their “servant” and fighting each other. The evil “magician” did his share, made brothers fight while he laughed at them from distance and exploited their shop. He advised brothers to separate their shops and start living away from each other.

The brothers separated their boundaries but it didn't mend their feud. They couldn't take each other out of their heart and lack of communication added more to the fire. The evil “servant” proposed to act as their mediator and they agreed.

The magician’s and the foreigner's machination were fulfilled. Both the brothers were in absolute control of them and they became master of their fortunes. 

66 years passed, the brothers- "Salaam and Namaste" continue to fight each other while their mother "Humanity", badly beaten & bruised, still crying for their help. The evil “servant” grew his own force and continue to manipulate and exploit them. The mean “foreigner” has returned to his shore but his exotic plant left back in the village continued growing and harming the "soil" and all other plants in vicinity. He had sent and appointed local people as his agents to manage the "plant" and collect all the profits.
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This post is a story of fiction written by NumeroUnity. This is copyright protected. While you are free to share it but a prior approval from the author is mandatory.
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This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda

The autor is half Human, half machine. Go Figure or just revel in what I write

54 comments:

  1. Wow...This post is full of Lesson with Humor,a Lesson we all lack in this 21st century...
    Great Read... :-)

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  2. This was quite a nice story and an awesome use of the WoW prompt for the weekend...

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  3. Wonderful use of metaphors to establish the plot. Well written.

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    1. Thanks Abhra. I just wrote impromptu and am glad that you liked it :)

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    1. Am glad , NAkur :) Keep reading!

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  5. What a wonderful story. I agree with Abhra.

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  6. Loved reading this post! Great writing.

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  7. you have used the two different but meaning the same in a good way to highlight the causes of downfall of our country even after 66 years. Thanks for sharing.

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    1. Thanks for liking it Kalpana. I just wanted to express my take on prompt and the environment around!

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  8. A STORY WITH A MORAL.GREAT!

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  9. What a beautiful concept Ekta--the metaphor clicks.

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    1. Thanks so much Indu. I am glad that you liked it :)

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  10. Very innovative idea..........

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  11. A WOW! post indeed! Loved reading every bit. :D

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    1. Lovely Ragini! I am glad that you enjoyed reading it :)

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  12. Ekta, what a good flow in an impromptu story! Good one! Enjoyed reading.

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    1. Thanks so much Sibi...glad tat you liked it :)

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  13. I liken your idea to the slavery that India had to suffer because of the rift created by the 'foreigner' with Salaam and Namaste alluding to the Muslim and Hindu brothers of India. But if I am getting it right, then this foreigner means the Britishers? Then who is the magician? Is the magician a Hindu or a Muslim? I'd rather not have you answer this question, because the magician might be the corrupt politician. But then, are Salaam and Namaste the only entities in this house where Humanity wails?

    Regards,
    Blasphemous Aesthete

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    1. Thanks for liking my post. Your questions are quite valid and you, yourself had given answers for them. Yup Magician can be read as "politician". I was short of time and that the only matching word that I could imagine then :)

      No Salaam and Namaste are not the only entities in house of humanity but in this story they were the central characters so we spoke about them, adding more references would have diluted the idea. Foreigner need not be mere Britishers.

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  14. Amazing! And I must say you have an awesome imagination.

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    1. Thanks so much Agrima! Welcome to my blog :)

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  15. Really awesome story. I like the way you've used metaphors.

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    1. Thank you soooo much. I am glad that you liked it! Efforts well paid :)

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  16. Beautiful story weaved around effective metaphors! We need Salaam namaste to come back together for the sake of peace, moreover for sanity!

    My world, my thoughts, my musings...

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    1. Thanks so much Upasana...what a lovely comment you left. Yes indeed we need them to be united again.

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  18. Have read quite a few posts when it came to Salaam and Namaste, enjoyed this one for many reasons,
    1. The ease with which the thought is put out.
    2. The beauty of the language.
    3. The use of the metaphors.
    4. The way it captured my attention through out the post.
    5. The lesson it taught me.
    Thanks for sharing this lovely post.

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  19. wonderful post...
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    Yours
    Shashikant

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    1. Thanks so much Shashi. You have a nice website.

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  21. It is nice that you want humanity to be united before the foreigner. Even before this foreigner came, other foreigners were looting desecrating India. You should tell the whole story including those involving Alexander, Nadir Shah and Turks.

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    1. That's a good idea. I shall try doing that sometime. Stay connected!

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  22. Just read your post. I'm absolutely amazed. Have begun forwarding it to a group of friends already. :)

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    1. Thanks SK. I hope you will keep my copyrights protected :)

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  23. Great one....liked the way the truth was revealed through a story....

    Regards,
    KHOJ
    http://khonjtheeternalsearch.blogspot.in/2015/01/being-sickular-pseudo-liberal.html

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  24. very well written...completely relative.

    loved the names.

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